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And here I find myself again poised in a frown.
Warm tears pushing through my eyes and pooling.
pool enough now they're falling.
The source is one the tears are many.
Split first for eyes then for gravity.
but one in the heart.
My heart.
My heart split from another.
Loss!
Loss and misery!
Freedom!
Freedom and growth!
Freedom and growth, loss and misery both
Oh to hear her name repeated in in my mind repeated in my mind.
Echoes of her presence in signs of her absence.
Slowly letting go and I should leave the process.
But struggle for grip on intangible objects which brings a certain cringe and...
Here I find myself again...
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eat your jungle oats
Posts: 387 Joined: 22-Mar-2012 Last visit: 20-Jun-2019 Location: "nowhere" exists
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Fantastic, love it Got any more?  With every great plan comes the pleasure of patience. Take a rest, and grab a suckle off the teat of life!
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Posts: 184 Joined: 01-Dec-2012 Last visit: 16-Oct-2019 Location: lost in transformation
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Hah, thanks. Wait for the next heart break  . This one was fresh, I wrote it in a chat box for the girl in question but didn't send it. We broke up Monday... were together almost 8 years, and I'm only 23, that's a large portion of my life. Not a messy break up, still very good friends. Upsetting all the same . I'll make more though, its fun.
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Love the second err... verse? I'm not very clued in as to poem anatomy.. but that part rolled off the tongue. Art Van D'lay wrote:Smoalk. It. And. See.
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If you improve we'll all improve
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Use any name, those words resonate with me very much. Brings me back to a place I was a year or two ago. I think it's great you chose to creatively express whatever is going on inside of you during this difficult time. More often then not the depths of our sorrow hold the biggest gold nuggets. Keep digging, keep going and definitely keep writing! Learning to know that I do not know.
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eat your jungle oats
Posts: 387 Joined: 22-Mar-2012 Last visit: 20-Jun-2019 Location: "nowhere" exists
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I would rather have a long meaningful relationship and been utterly destroyed at the end (passion is everything good or bad) than many pointless ones that left me feeling like nothing happened Your writing is even better knowing what its about, and it shows your attitude is headed the right way, accepting loss and looking forward to growth Keep shining the apple With every great plan comes the pleasure of patience. Take a rest, and grab a suckle off the teat of life!
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Posts: 184 Joined: 01-Dec-2012 Last visit: 16-Oct-2019 Location: lost in transformation
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"I'm not very clued in as to poem anatomy"
I'm not hugely, I didn't really follow an explicit structure.
And thank you A.I.D. for the encouragement. Got to keep mining for gold in that sorrow.
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Posts: 184 Joined: 01-Dec-2012 Last visit: 16-Oct-2019 Location: lost in transformation
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Changalvia, I agree, I've come out of this relationship with a friend for life. Worth the pain.
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