AM I SINKING.
I AM SWIMMIMG.
I AM SINKING.
AM I SWIMMIMG.
THIS IS HOW MY LIFE PROCEEDS.
IN A FLASH OF WHITE YET THO.
ITS BRIGHTNESS SHINES THOUGH MY EYES CLOSED.
BRIGHTER THAN A HALOGEN.
THAT NEVER SEEMS TO SHOW.
THE FEAR I HAVE INSIDE.


yeah I know its rubbish but I write hundreds of these things when back from alphabet journeys THCDMTLSDMDMA thought I share one of the ones I actually like and have read to others without them bursting into laughter regards from WHIPPY.

i dont find it to be rubbish at all my friend.
i think its honest, i think its raw, and i think it expresses exactly how ive felt quite a few times when the molecule is doing its thing.

im glad i read this, and thank you!

dont ever doubt yourself, rubbish poems are only rubbish when they are dishonest.
this seems honestly beautiful.

WoW thanks my friend no-one has ever said that about my poems before maybe I will put on some more in the future if others like it too???
regards whippy

Actually, I really dig it.

I might be wrong, but I feel as if it displays a sense of apprehension towards pushing further into your "journey".. As I said, I might be off, but... I could totally imagine this as a.. prologue(for lack of a better term) for a chronicling timeline towards something bigger.

that's so great im glad people actually know what im writing about I will add another verse when I get the inspiration.thanks for your kind words.